Friday, February 16, 2007

Broken Vows




We were once so soo close..
I knew
Everything about you
Your secrets
When you whispered to me
I listened
Your beauty
Breathtaking
I knew your every alley
Hill and valley
Your streets
Plush carpets
Of gold
Like one surreal
Family room
Whenever I needed to
I cried my heart out
To you



Other cities have wowed me
Allowed me
To forget
For awhile
Your smile
Your song
Not for long

I need you
More than ever now
To renew my vow
That I have broken
Because
I have let you fade
Away
While my right hand
Still functions
Just fine



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20 Comments:

Blogger The Dreamer said...

Wow. First comment!

That made me cry.
And that says alot.

The last three lines are just beautiful.
as is the rest of the post

February 16, 2007 2:01 PM  
Blogger Independent Frum Thinker said...

Im Eshkacheich Yerushalaim.....sigh...

February 16, 2007 2:15 PM  
Blogger Jameel @ The Muqata said...

We lost the Torah to the Christians, because we stopped learning it (and learned Gemara instead)

We lost Hebrew to the Maskilim, because we stopped speaking it (and spoke Yiddish instead).

We lost Eretz Yisrael and Yerushalayim...because we stopped living there, and yearning to be there.

February 17, 2007 8:21 PM  
Blogger Jameel @ The Muqata said...

PS: I didn't make up the above, it was said by Rabbi Wein (quoting R' Yaakov Kaminetsky z'l) and Rabbi Riskin during a pro/con aliya debate in the 1980's)

February 17, 2007 8:23 PM  
Blogger Lakewood Venter said...

Very interesting Jameel....

February 17, 2007 11:21 PM  
Blogger knaidel maidel said...

Beautiful post. I can relate to every line.

February 17, 2007 11:23 PM  
Blogger Lvnsm27 said...

Great poem and reminder

February 17, 2007 11:44 PM  
Blogger David_on_the_Lake said...

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February 17, 2007 11:55 PM  
Blogger David_on_the_Lake said...

the_dreamer...
Dvarim hayotzim min halev....

thank u

IFT...
indeed..

Jameel..
I agree we must yearn for and crave Yerushalayim..the spiritual place that it is..not the capital of modern Israel..
My 5 years in yerushalyim were unbelievably spiritual..and I'm quite certain they would've been just as spitritual were it still under Ottoman control..
It is that that I miss...that feeling of being connected..to the center of everything..

knaidel...
Thanks.

lvnsm..
thank u

February 18, 2007 12:00 AM  
Blogger The Dreamer said...

Aside from the meaning, which, as I've already written, is beautiful, your writing style is superb in this piece. I love the assonance in consecutive lines. It truly adds to the mood of the poem.

February 18, 2007 12:14 AM  
Blogger nuch a chosid said...

אם אשכחך ירושלים תשכח ימיני

February 18, 2007 1:25 AM  
Blogger David_on_the_Lake said...

the_dreamer...
wow..thanks
:-)

nuch a chossid...
cool..How do u type in Hebrew?

February 18, 2007 10:58 AM  
Blogger JewishBiFemme said...

Beautiful. We all can relate im sure..

February 18, 2007 2:06 PM  
Blogger chav said...

when comes the messiah?

February 18, 2007 8:05 PM  
Blogger shy said...

Wow Very warm!!!

February 18, 2007 8:08 PM  
Blogger David_on_the_Lake said...

jbf...
yea..on some level or another..

chav...
I cant tell you..
I'm sorry

shy..
Thanks
:-)

February 18, 2007 8:26 PM  
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February 19, 2007 12:36 AM  
Blogger BarbaraFromCalifornia said...

There is a website that allows us to look at the kotel daily.

Your post is a good reminder of what is going on today.

I have a smiliar post (although with a bold question) today.

February 19, 2007 9:38 AM  
Blogger yingerman said...

Miss it (sigh)

February 19, 2007 11:52 AM  
Blogger David_on_the_Lake said...

Barb...
Thanks..I'll check it out

yinger..
did u live there..?

February 19, 2007 8:47 PM  

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