Wednesday, August 08, 2007

There are forces...




There are forces..
That force us
to admit {pray}

We love our cars (bod
ies)
We love our speed (fun)

We love feeling BIGger {immortal}
But there are forces
Forces like forward motion {d_ath}
And {grav}ity
and so we’re betrayed
{feels like it}
Flung {fling}
Trapped {depr
rest shh} laid to

..and we hate it.. {but who cares?}


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13 Comments:

Blogger The Dreamer said...

gosh. i had to read that about six times before i got it...
and i still don't think i got all of it.
care to explain, so i don't feel like a fool?

August 09, 2007 12:04 AM  
Blogger ~ Sarah ~ said...

disturbing a bit. i think. maybe.

August 09, 2007 1:38 AM  
Blogger come running said...

Fantastic!!!

August 09, 2007 8:37 AM  
Blogger David_on_the_Lake said...

dreamer...
Its kinda hard to explain...
Its a sensory poem..u have to flow along with the words...
It's sort of a stark view of our loves and their trappings (literally)..and the metaphor for life and its trappings..following the poem in parhentesis..with some arrangements and omissions to help in the sensory experience..

sarah...
well..the subject matter is such..

come running...
thanks!

August 09, 2007 11:54 AM  
Blogger Fajita said...

aha... I hear ya.

shhh, shhhh, I think it's all gonna be ok...

but I don't know.

August 09, 2007 12:51 PM  
Anonymous the dreamer said...

it kinda reminds me of something, but i can't remember what...

August 09, 2007 6:50 PM  
Blogger David_on_the_Lake said...

fajita...
ye..nobdy knows..

dreamer...
hmm well..this is written somewhat in the style of the poet
e e cummings
I even alluded to his name by leaving out 2 Es..

August 09, 2007 9:44 PM  
Blogger The Dreamer said...

well, yeah, i knew that... i was actually gonna write that it reminded me of his style... but i'm trying to remember something else...

August 09, 2007 10:52 PM  
Blogger The Dreamer said...

what's that poem about differences between young and old... reading between the lines...? can't seem to place it...

August 09, 2007 11:01 PM  
Blogger David_on_the_Lake said...

oooh..a cultured group here..I love it.

Hmm not sure which poem ur referring to

August 10, 2007 10:21 AM  
Blogger Bas~Melech said...

Man, you've been posting up a storm since I was last here... when am I gonna read all this...

But I also didn't quite get this post...

August 11, 2007 6:03 PM  
Blogger Sara with NO H said...

:( don't know why this upset me more every time I read it. The picture and music alone, were probably enough.

August 12, 2007 12:34 PM  
Blogger David_on_the_Lake said...

bas_melech...
welcome back..
yea..I'm sorta unstoppable these days..lol

sara...
Thats ok..its ok to get upset over tragedies

August 12, 2007 5:04 PM  

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